The narrative by Andrew Gilbert, a 59-year-old accountant
living in Pennsylvania.
Three months after my son and daughter vanished; I decided
to do a father intervention to find out what happened to them. Here is my
adventurous story in Jumanji. The day they went missing, I remember my children
running in the house really excited about something. David and Gabby usually
get home from school around 4pm. They like to hangout with friends after school
before driving home. That day, though,
they came home at 5pm. I asked them where had they been. They said that their
friends heard a pounding drum during cross country practice. So, David and his
friends, Trace and Matt, and Gabby and her friend Jen, went to explore after
school. Together, they found a board game called Jumanji. They asked me if they
could go to Matt’s house later to play the game. I didn’t care so they left our
house at 6pm. I know they got to Matt’s because Gabby texted me at 6:10pm to
tell me that they had arrived safely—she was always a daddy’s girl. I called
Gabby around 11pm to see how everything was going and she did not answer. David
didn’t answer my call either. I called Matt’s parents and they didn’t answer
either. When I drove over just to make sure everything was okay—I was
introduced to a parent’s worst nightmare. I had to knock for about 5 minutes
before Matt’s dad answered the door. After he invited me in, he apologized and
said that he and his wife fell asleep around 9:30pm. I told him that I was
concerned about my kids’ whereabouts because it was weird for neither of them
to answer my calls. He said that they were in the basement. We went downstairs
and all we saw were a few sodas, a bowl of popcorn that had been spilled and
the board game Jumanji. When I tried calling Gabby again, I heard her phone
ring in the corner. All of their phones were in the basement. Fast forward a
day, the whole city was on a manhunt for the lost children. My wife couldn’t
stop crying and I just had one goal—to find my kids. After three months, I knew
it was time to do something. I remember the board game, so I asked Matt’s
parents to look for it. I heard the drums when I opened it and all I remember
after reading the instructions was a flash of green. I woke up in a forest. I
thought it was a dream. I noticed a huge hippo in the river and when I stepped
on a stick, the hippo charged at me. I was so confused so I just began running.
When I reached the edge of the forest, I jumped off the edge of a cliff into a
river. On the riverbank, I noticed Gabby’s watch that she always wears. I tried
calling out for Gabby and kept walking until I reached a market full of people.
I reached the bazaar where a man that looked and dressed like Jafar (the bad
guy in Aladdin) awaited my presence.
He said that he knew what I was looking for and in order for my children not to
die, I would have to give him the Gold Gem. When he said that, the ground began
to tremble and I fell through the earth to a dark pit. I followed the path lit
with torches. (He never told me his name so I refer to him as Jafar) Jafar
appeared behind me and began telling me the story of the Gold Gem. It’s almost
like I was in the story, but the people around me did not notice my presence.
He led me to camp where men were huddled around a fire and an older woman told
a story. She began telling the ancient story of the Gold Gem. She said that a
long time ago, there were three brothers that fought to rule Jumanji as king.
All of the brother’s soldiers died in what she called the Gold War. The spirits
of the soldiers were angry at the brothers so they all formed together to
create the Gold Gem, which had enormous powers. It was the reason that Jumanji
still exists today, but it was hidden, and whoever found it would possess all
the power in the world. Then, I felt Jafar touch my soldier and I felt a cold
wind and the setting changed to a cold room where I saw David, Jen, and Matt.
They were trying to look at a map. I asked Jafar to show me my daughter. When I
looked behind Jafar, I saw Gabby and Trace running from men that were shooting
at them. I yelled and began running towards them, but I fell through a hole and
found myself at the bazaar, where I began. Jafar looked at me and said that I
had 3 days. So, I started my journey. I befriended some English-speaking
animals that helped me find the kids. It turns out that Gabby and Trace had
stolen some food from the market and were fleeing, but Jafar’s soldiers saw
them. They told me that in order for all of us to leave the game, we had to
save Jumanji by returning the Gold Gem back to the Soldiers’ Souls—which turned
out to be a large mountain. The kids had found the Gold Gem and were looking at
the map to see where to put it so that it would be safe from Jafar. After three
days, we managed to save Jumnaji from the threat of Jafar, and when we finished
the game, we all woke up in Matt’s basement. That’s the story of my adventure
in Jumanji. I don’t go into detail about my adventures within Jumanji or the
aftermath of us returning, but don’t worry—that’s in the sequel.
(990 Words)
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Author’s Note
The big theme from the readings this week was the twist that
each story had another story being told inside of the original story—so, a
story within a story. The setting of the readings led me to my idea of Jumanji;
it’s also one of my favorite movies (both the one with Robin Williams and the
new one with The Rock, Kevin Hart, and Jack Black). This is the father’s version
of the story in a narrative form. I hope you enjoyed it!
Jumanji: Welcome to the Jungle. Web Source
Unit: Persian Tales Story: The City of Nothing-in-the-World
Unit: Arabian Nights by Andrew Lang (used the whole reading as a reference)
Hi Melanie! I absolutely love Jumanji so reading your version was very exciting! I thought it was awesome that you included the parents as more actionable and present in the story than the original Jumanji did. Your ending left me wanting to read the next part of your story. The Jafar character made for a great personal touch to your version of the story.
ReplyDeleteHey Melanie! I enjoyed reading your story! It’s been a really long time since I watched the original Jumanji movie, but I did see the recent reboot and I enjoyed it. Your version of the story was interesting, and I liked that you told it from the father’s point of view! I like how you went about creating a frame story like in Arabian Nights. Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteHi Melanie! I liked your story within a story idea! That is such a great writing technique and automatically makes your story more interesting. It was a cool idea to tell the story from the father's perspective because that is something the Jumanji movies have not yet done. This made your story even more compelling. I am looking forward to reading the "sequel" to hear more about their adventures in the game.
ReplyDeleteHey Melanie! I love the idea of doing a stories related to Jumanji as each part of the game is so uncalled for and it gives you a lot of room to be creative and invent the craziest scenes! I love how your story is so descriptive so that we can feel like we are actually Andrew Gilbert, but it seems like the major parts of the plotline are getting a little buried by description of the scenes. If you were to ever revise this story, maybe you can focus less on the movement of the characters and setting the scene when then move to different settings and instead, invest more words into describing how the plot evolves and making the specific challenge that they will confront in the story (finding the kids and finding the Gold Gem) more upfront while taking away some of the "fluff" in the story. I look forward to reading the sequel to this story!
ReplyDeleteHey Melanie! I just finished reading your story and I love it! I thought you did a really nice job of writing it and retelling it. I also thought it was a unique idea to tell the story from a different perspective, definitely allows the reader to see things from a different point of view. I look forward to reading more of your stories in the future. Overall, nicely done!
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